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Response to Tuesday Tryouts: Summer Style

Hmmm…my friend Margo Roby says write a summer poem. Margo says write a list of all things summer and then don’t mention any of the things on the list. And don’t sound cliché.

OK here goes:

One cliché summer sunset over the Laurentiens photo…so far so good…I’m not sounding cliché, I’m looking cliché…lol.

Ok… seriously…one summer-everything-on-my-list-not-mentioned poem, actually, a very surrealistic poem.

Summer walk


if we walk by the side of the river
whose curling waves undermine the bank
if we walk among the trees
whose curling leaves mark our faces green
if we hasten through the darkness
that is full of hands with curling fingers
if we evade the whispering waves
the writhing leaves
the clutching fingers
and if the house still stands
and the door is open
and we enter unscathed
a fire will be waiting
and we shall rise like smoke
blacken the rafters
and dance on the roof like birds
fly away
and pierce the sky with our beaks

Comments: 20

  • June 19, 2012
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    Oh, but I love it! It’s great aloud, too. I love tracing the imagery the speaker conjures up. I hope you enjoy the result. The photograph is gorgeous.

  • June 19, 2012
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    Oh, this is more than summer. This is spring in overdrive! Love it.

  • Frank Gasch

    June 19, 2012
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    Soft and touching.

  • June 19, 2012
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    Veronica!!! This is amazing!!! Seriously, I love this!! Such wonderful images and the repetition of curling for waves, leaves and fingers and the turning into the curling of smoke ….the birds!! Brilliant and the photography is stunning! What a treat this visit was, thank you!!

  • June 19, 2012
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    Veronica, I read this just before falling off to sleep last night, and I had the most vivid dreams about curly finger leaves in a forest! 😀

  • catherine llewellyn

    June 20, 2012
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    this is very wonderful – grabbed me in the middle and pulled – potent X

  • June 21, 2012
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    I love the repeating images of curling and then at the end, how it all uncurls and dances away from the roof top.

  • June 23, 2012
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    Beautiful poem, V. The photo was a perk!

  • June 23, 2012
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    Oh, that is so wonderful! The imagery…it made my heart flutter for summer!

  • June 24, 2012
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    Beautiful. I’ll take that summer walk any day.

    Richard

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