Hello again Sunday Whirl…missed you

August 29, 2012

I’ve missed a couple of weeks of whirls for one reason or another. You know what I’m like…sometimes I really need a good kick to write poetry.
So thank you Brenda for these great words. It’s a huge pleasure to have a reason to write.

dusk, link, trace, empty, essential, rose, pencil, fence, chain, recipe, forgiven, operator

That’s the way dusk usually is she said
I think she said it because she thought she saw a trace of empathy in my eyes
Or because she was looking at my sketchbook thru her decaf latte

She dyed her hair blue and cut it short, except for the fringe in her eyes
She thought it was essential for her new look and sequined shoes
I thought she looked like a lost mermaid in the city

I thought I’d tell her my grandmother’s recipe for gingerbread
That she can make on evenings when she reaches level ground
Or when she needs to break the chain of her decaf lattes

Or when the city feels too small or when she needs absolution
Forgiven? She said she is the sole operator of her destiny
I wondered how it must be to see the world in rose thru a blue fringe

She left half her latte which had gone too cold by then
She walked out the door into the rain-filled alley throwing ice like a blue comet
And passed thru the hole in a broken-down fence

I want to leave too because this room is four walls of concrete
That will not allow me to breathe properly
And I know she will skip classes and cartwheel on her fingertips and run free without reins

She is my link away from the nights when I cling to my sketchbook
My mind feels empty like air between wings or a sign in the dark
And only the pencil in my writing hand seems real

Check out these fun whirls from Carol, Walt, Hannah, and Veronica and then maybe write something off the top of your head. I’d love to read it!

art: a tiny little oil painting of an Oxfordshire sunset on a front cover of an old book of carols…What? It’s like a stretched canvas.  🙂


Can you do it...yes you can!
And the results are in! The Northmoor Village flower and veg show.

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  • Reply sorrygnat August 29, 2012 at 10:38 am

    loved your piece!

    • Reply Veronica August 30, 2012 at 10:37 pm

      Esther, you’re a sweet sweetie. Thank you so much for your support. Hope you had a lovely birthday! 🙂

  • Reply veronicabalfourpaul August 29, 2012 at 11:08 am

    love it. @LOst mermaid in the city’ great image for such a fluid character. And I love the bit ‘my mind feels empty like air between wings’ Lovely image. 🙂

    • Reply Veronica August 30, 2012 at 10:36 pm

      Thanks Veronica. I love your name 🙂

  • Reply Sabra Bowers August 30, 2012 at 2:52 pm

    The use of the pronoun she was a great choice for this poem. You made her real…I’d like to read more about her.

    • Reply Veronica August 30, 2012 at 10:35 pm

      Thanks Sabra, maybe I should write more with this she. Only thing is the more I develp an enigma like this one the more she stops being an enigma…know what I mean? It’s a fine line, isn’t it.

  • Reply Jo Ann J. A. Jordan August 30, 2012 at 3:25 pm

    Wonderful piece… The character almost seems like she could build into a story. I went a totally different direction with those words. It is amazing what each of us has in our imaginations given the same starting place.

    • Reply Veronica August 30, 2012 at 10:34 pm

      I love that Jo Ann, don’t you? So much imagination. I always look forward to reading what others have done with the words. 🙂

  • Reply Paula Tohline Calhoun September 1, 2012 at 12:48 pm

    What a terrific Wordle! And guess what! You were not the last to post one! I just managed to get mine in before next week’s (No. 72)!

    I love the whimsy in yours, and the sense of mystery. Very nice read. Since no one else will read this one, I’ll give you the link so you can (if and when you have the time!)


    • Reply Veronica September 2, 2012 at 3:36 am

      That was a bunch of fun words, wasn’t it Paula. What do you make of this week’s words? Not sure I like the sound of “gassed”. Heading over to your site now. 🙂

  • Reply akl October 30, 2012 at 7:09 am

    beautiful workds and a beautiful image. Thank you for linking up to TALU!

    • Reply Veronica October 30, 2012 at 2:21 pm

      Hello AKL aspiring lottery winner! So nice of you to say hello and thank you for the lovely comment. Aren’t we lucky to find people like Deb who give us an opportunity to meet each other. I’m heading over to your blog now to take a peek (maybe a long look…maybe even a stalk). 🙂

  • Reply Azara October 30, 2012 at 9:04 am

    Fingertip cartwheels – nice imagery. Visiting from TALU.

    • Reply Veronica October 30, 2012 at 1:23 pm

      Hi Azara, thank you so much for sending me such a lovely comment. I’m so glad you left your site addy because now I can check out Tesseract. Can’t wait. 🙂

  • Reply Anne Kimball October 30, 2012 at 10:10 am

    Oh Veronica, this was so beautiful! I al so envious of people who can write poetry, and you surely have the gift. Thanks for sharing on TALU!

    • Reply Veronica October 30, 2012 at 1:21 pm

      Hi Anne, so lovely that you stopped by. Thank you. I love that site TALU and would like to write a post about this kind of sharing…including links to your wonderful Funny Farm. 🙂

  • Reply Debbie McCormick October 30, 2012 at 4:10 pm

    Very interesting. I enjoy posts like these that are “outside the box”. Well well done. (TALU)

    • Reply Veronica October 30, 2012 at 5:02 pm

      Thank you Debbie, and thanks for the link-up opportunity. I love your about page. You’re whole family seems full of good humour and charm. Have put your blog into my favorites and can’t wait to find some time to read thru. 🙂

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